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I was wondering if, Feb 17, 2014 7:47:28 GMT -6 zamberin likes this

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Post by nikki5698 on Feb 17, 2014 7:47:28 GMT -6

You guy would read my story.
I started it awhile ago, then stopped writing because I thought it was terrible. (It still may be idk) and then I was reading it and decided to continue it.
I really want to be published some day. SO, if you guys could read it and give me ANY type of criticism, (Good or Bad) that would be so lovely because I would love for my writing to improve. This is the link to the page where it is. According to the thingy next to my story description it'll take about 26 minutes for you guys to read. I'm not finished with it yet, and not even close. But I would really love any criticism on it.
figment.com/books/700263-Killer-Melody

prouvaire Moderator kakyoin didn't die for this Posts: 3,180 Gender: nb (he/ve)	I was wondering if, Feb 17, 2014 9:14:13 GMT -6 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by prouvaire on Feb 17, 2014 9:14:13 GMT -6 yeah I'll totally read it! I'm busy for a while but when I get a chance I'll do it k c:
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nikki5698 Advanced Posts: 100	I was wondering if, Feb 17, 2014 21:48:17 GMT -6 via mobile Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by nikki5698 on Feb 17, 2014 21:48:17 GMT -6 Yayyy thank you

nikki5698 Advanced Posts: 100	I was wondering if, Feb 20, 2014 16:22:17 GMT -6 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by nikki5698 on Feb 20, 2014 16:22:17 GMT -6 This is just a bump to get it back up there again.

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I was wondering if, Feb 20, 2014 17:55:44 GMT -6 via mobile

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Post by j00ntree on Feb 20, 2014 17:55:44 GMT -6

yeah, definitely!
i really admire the fact that you've managed to actually pour everything out into readable prose— it's just something i've always thought was a little difficult to do sometimes, haha.

like personally i'd give up after paragraph one.
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I was wondering if, Feb 20, 2014 18:06:25 GMT -6

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Post by nikki5698 on Feb 20, 2014 18:06:25 GMT -6

Awh thank you. I love writing so much. Like people at my school are like "Ugh, we have to write 5 paragraphs?" and I'm like "Kay I'll write 20." ((A bit over exagerated but yeah))
I sent it to my moms friend and she gave me some critiques, so I still have to make some changes to it.
I'm sure you could write perfectly fine, you just have to get the inspiration to do so.

zamberin Contest winner poundpoundpound on my skull Posts: 2,572 Gender: none	I was wondering if, Feb 20, 2014 19:44:49 GMT -6 via mobile Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by zamberin on Feb 20, 2014 19:44:49 GMT -6 NIKKI I AM THE SAME I S2G ALSO WE STARTED THE ROLEPLAY ARE U JOINING
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